All Comments on 'Home improvements Pt. 01'

Good story. Needs proof reading and some editing. keep on writing!

Check spelling & editing.

Thanks for your comment much appreciated. I will get this sorted.

Gosh, the reader can almost feel her carnal need to be fucked. Dialogue is sparse but placed well but I suggest breaking out the dialogue from within a paragraph instead of "he said....." and use quotes, etc.

OMG the sex, the sex! What a hot passionate woman. Every guy loves it when a woman is so excited that she likes having her arse licked. Nicely done.